After you have let your first draft sit, here are a few things to note along the way when you pick it up again.
1. Do you still like the story?
2. Do you have any trouble suspending disbelief?
3. Are you turning pages to find out what happens or is the text too wordy?
4. Could the tension be taken up a notch?
5. Do events happen organically?
6. Are their passages that are written lovely, but are too flowery and draw attention away from the story?
7. Does the dialog sound fake.
8. Are there long passages of uninterrupted text that might be changed into dialog?
9. Are you still routing for or despising the correct people?
10. Have any of your secondary characters taken over the book?
11. How is the ending? Does the story seem to stop to abruptly? Does it fall off a cliff. Does it drag? Should it end a few pages earlier?
12. What about the beginning? Do you have a good opening line? Do you start with action right away or does it take a few pages to get going?
13. Does information get passed along through the narrator telling the reader or through the narrator seeing it for themselves in active scenes?
14. If you are writing humor, do you laugh in the right places? If you’re writing horror, do you jump in the right places? If you are writing fantasy or sci-fi, are the rules of your world consistent?
15. Does you setting seem vivid, like a snapshot? Does it evoke the intended emotion?
16. What can you strengthen to take the book from good to great?
Source: Kathleen Temean